Post by Movie Lord Productions on Mar 4, 2008 22:09:17 GMT -5
Hey, check the scene out and give some feedback on what you think about it. It's going to be my first attempt at horror, so...
FADE IN:
EXT. DESERT - DAY
A 1967 Chevy Impala is seen speeding down the desert road,
and "Black Sunshine" can be heard playing inside the car.
There are 5 people packed into it, and a bunch of suitcases
are in the trunk. Tommy, the oldest of the five, is driving.
He keeps looking at the gas gauge, and Marie starts getting
pretty worried.
MARIE
We're alright for gas... Right?
TOMMY
Yeah we should be good...
MARIE
Are we going to run out of gas
before we get to the nearest gas
station or not, Tommy? You're
scaring me, looking up and down
and up and down like that.
TOMMY
Yeah, we still have three fourths
of a tank of gas left. Don't worry
baby, I wouldn't lie to you.
Marie takes his word for it, and Lenny leans forward from
the middle of the back seat.
LENNY
Hey, do you think you could stop
for a few minutes? I really have
to pee. Like, bad.
Tommy sighs, and he pulls over to the side of the road. He
turns the car off, and everyone gets out. Marie and Jenna
walk off, Tommy and Eric walk over to the other side of the
car, and Tommy gets out a cigarette. Lenny runs out off the
road for a while until you can't really see him very well
any more.
TOMMY
(puffing cigarette)
Oh, what a god damn trip, let me
tell you...
ERIC
Are we doing alright for gas?
TOMMY
Hmm? Hell no. We got like, an
eighth of a tank.
ERIC
Damn. Where the hell is the
closest town, anyway? I don't want
to die.
TOMMY
Town's right there.
Tommy points ahead of the car, and Eric can see a few
buildings in the distance. One of the first buildings is a
gas station.
ERIC
Damn. We got shit lucky, stopping
for gas. And Lenny was saying we
wouldn't need it...
TOMMY
I know.. Who let him come with us
anyway?
ERIC
It was Jenna's idea. She's his
sister, and she's really worried
for the kid's social health. No
offense, but I don't think he can
get very social at all...
TOMMY
Ha. Ain't that the truth...
Tommy throws his cigarette on the ground and wipes it out.
He looks ahead at the nearby town, and then he looks over at
the girls, who are on their way back to the car. He sees
Lenny in the distance jogging back, too.
TOMMY
Good. They're all coming.
The two girls get to the car, and Tommy and Eric move out of
their way so that the girls can get in. Jenna just happens
to glance at the gas tank and she gets back out.
JENNA
You fucking told us all that you
had almost a full tank left!
TOMMY
Shut up! I didn't want to scare
Marie! The town's like, half a
mile that way anyway!
Lenny gets back to the car and jumps in the back seat.
TOMMY
Now let's go.
Tommy gets into the car and turns the key. The engine starts
and the car is now speeding down the road.
FADE IN:
EXT. DESERT - DAY
A 1967 Chevy Impala is seen speeding down the desert road,
and "Black Sunshine" can be heard playing inside the car.
There are 5 people packed into it, and a bunch of suitcases
are in the trunk. Tommy, the oldest of the five, is driving.
He keeps looking at the gas gauge, and Marie starts getting
pretty worried.
MARIE
We're alright for gas... Right?
TOMMY
Yeah we should be good...
MARIE
Are we going to run out of gas
before we get to the nearest gas
station or not, Tommy? You're
scaring me, looking up and down
and up and down like that.
TOMMY
Yeah, we still have three fourths
of a tank of gas left. Don't worry
baby, I wouldn't lie to you.
Marie takes his word for it, and Lenny leans forward from
the middle of the back seat.
LENNY
Hey, do you think you could stop
for a few minutes? I really have
to pee. Like, bad.
Tommy sighs, and he pulls over to the side of the road. He
turns the car off, and everyone gets out. Marie and Jenna
walk off, Tommy and Eric walk over to the other side of the
car, and Tommy gets out a cigarette. Lenny runs out off the
road for a while until you can't really see him very well
any more.
TOMMY
(puffing cigarette)
Oh, what a god damn trip, let me
tell you...
ERIC
Are we doing alright for gas?
TOMMY
Hmm? Hell no. We got like, an
eighth of a tank.
ERIC
Damn. Where the hell is the
closest town, anyway? I don't want
to die.
TOMMY
Town's right there.
Tommy points ahead of the car, and Eric can see a few
buildings in the distance. One of the first buildings is a
gas station.
ERIC
Damn. We got shit lucky, stopping
for gas. And Lenny was saying we
wouldn't need it...
TOMMY
I know.. Who let him come with us
anyway?
ERIC
It was Jenna's idea. She's his
sister, and she's really worried
for the kid's social health. No
offense, but I don't think he can
get very social at all...
TOMMY
Ha. Ain't that the truth...
Tommy throws his cigarette on the ground and wipes it out.
He looks ahead at the nearby town, and then he looks over at
the girls, who are on their way back to the car. He sees
Lenny in the distance jogging back, too.
TOMMY
Good. They're all coming.
The two girls get to the car, and Tommy and Eric move out of
their way so that the girls can get in. Jenna just happens
to glance at the gas tank and she gets back out.
JENNA
You fucking told us all that you
had almost a full tank left!
TOMMY
Shut up! I didn't want to scare
Marie! The town's like, half a
mile that way anyway!
Lenny gets back to the car and jumps in the back seat.
TOMMY
Now let's go.
Tommy gets into the car and turns the key. The engine starts
and the car is now speeding down the road.
