Post by blg on Sept 5, 2009 14:43:24 GMT -5
This is a hard script to review. Not because it isn't good - it is, very much so. The way Hanelle has approached creating this trilogy means that Book 1 feels more like the first act of a much longer film than a complete story. There's nothing wrong with this at all, it's actually a very cool approach, but it makes it harder to review the first part on its own merits. Depending on how I feel after Book II, I may forgo reviewing it and instead review the trilogy as a whole. Anyway, on with the actual review:
The script starts with a bang, introducing the U.F.O. within the first five or so pages in a suspenseful build-up that crescendos in the reveal of the spacecraft. From here, we are provided with a look at the effect it has on the characters. This is how we get to know them and their personalities, as we do not know them before the aliens arrive, and so we discern their characters through their reactions. This event also brings all of the characters together instantly, from the common public such as Ron, the President, and to the military characters. It's a neat opening, and it saves Hanelle from writing the standard 20 pages of watching the lives of the characters move through their comparatively-mundane lives before the U.F.O lands that this sort of story would so often involve.
The focus in this script is on exposition and plot rather than character. It establishes the conflict between the ancient humans and the Moxies, and gives us a thrilling action scene as a conclusion to tease at the battles to come. The characters, while well-defined, were not developed greatly, but I'm almost certain this is a by-product of the three-film structure, as Hanelle has proven herself to be one of the best character writers on the site. I'm assuming there will be a stronger focus on development now that the exposition is out of the way.
The Coming: Book I is an exciting and well-written script that, while lacking in some respects, sets the scene for something much grander.
4/5
The script starts with a bang, introducing the U.F.O. within the first five or so pages in a suspenseful build-up that crescendos in the reveal of the spacecraft. From here, we are provided with a look at the effect it has on the characters. This is how we get to know them and their personalities, as we do not know them before the aliens arrive, and so we discern their characters through their reactions. This event also brings all of the characters together instantly, from the common public such as Ron, the President, and to the military characters. It's a neat opening, and it saves Hanelle from writing the standard 20 pages of watching the lives of the characters move through their comparatively-mundane lives before the U.F.O lands that this sort of story would so often involve.
The focus in this script is on exposition and plot rather than character. It establishes the conflict between the ancient humans and the Moxies, and gives us a thrilling action scene as a conclusion to tease at the battles to come. The characters, while well-defined, were not developed greatly, but I'm almost certain this is a by-product of the three-film structure, as Hanelle has proven herself to be one of the best character writers on the site. I'm assuming there will be a stronger focus on development now that the exposition is out of the way.
The Coming: Book I is an exciting and well-written script that, while lacking in some respects, sets the scene for something much grander.
4/5